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Truthful Lies

I see you for who
You truly are
No starstruck eyes
No racing heart
I know you are
Anything but pure
You know I know
But have you told her

Oh, Mr. player are you happy now
You've got a girl after so many knocked down
Oh, Mr.player, you've spread your lies so thinly
You've got her wrapped around your little pinky
But don't think you've fooled me
with your pretty disguise
I see you in the corner
Spreading your truthful lies

You've got her head filled
With false fairy dreams
You're telling her
You're as perfect as you seem
You say she's the one
You've been so blind before
Sure you've made some mistakes
But you won't anymore

Oh, Mr. player are you happy now
You've got a girl after so many knocked down
Oh, Mr.player, you've spread your lies so thinly
You've got her wrapped around your little pinky
But don't think you've fooled me
with your pretty disguise
I see you in the corner
Spreading your truthful lies

Bridge

Pretty soon you'll be begging her
"Please take me back
I know I didn't mean it
When you caught me at that"
But you know she'll finally see
You boy ain't naive
And I'll be there watching
When she finally sees

Oh, Mr. player are you happy now
You've got a girl after so many knocked down
Oh, Mr.player, you've spread your lies so thinly
You've got her wrapped around your little pinky
But don't think you've fooled me
with your pretty disguise
I see you in the corner
Spreading your truthful lies

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Something I Couldn't See

V1
The night you said good-bye
I sat there on my bedroom floor
Looking at all the photographs, the letters
All the memories you threw out the door

The next day, I'll wake up
And I'll never stop asking why
I was so stupid to trust a guy like you
You hurt me with your believable lies

Pre-Chorus
You had me captivated,
But now I regret it
Chorus
Who knew you'd be the one to break my heart
I thought we'd painted some flawless art
But you found a problem with the picture
Something I couldn't see
But you took that mistake
And used it to break me

V2
Well maybe I am the one to blame
I never saw through your fake smiles
And I'm regretting that I never woke up
My dreams were too good, too much like a child

Pre-Chorus
You had me captivated
But now I regret it
{Repeat Chorus}

Bridge
There's people telling me to move on
Don't waste time writing songs
But what else do you do
When someone you loved, leaves
It'll be one a.m.
I don't wanna believe it's the end
So I'll cry myself, cry myself to sleep

Chorus
Who knew you'd be the one to break my heart
I thought we'd painted some flawless art
But you found a problem with the picture
Something I couldn't see
But you took that mistake
And used it to break me

Outro: It was something I couldn't see...

Thanks for reading!

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Oh my Swift!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am seriously smiling from ear to ear right now :) I lovelovelove you!!!!! oh my swift oms oms!!!!!!!!!!! thank you thank you thank you!!! and i'll try to work on the bridge. I was kinda modeling it after Taylor's 'Breathe', the whole "it's really early in the morning and i'm thinking of you" theme. I already have a sense of the melody picked out, so if there's any changes that would work with the melody, i'll change it. But THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! i loved when you said that the part in the chorus blew you away...which is funny because I wrote the song in like thirty minutes last night. Sorry for writing a novel, I'm just SO HAPPY!!!!!!

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Hello there! Could you review this song?
I wrote this song about a break-up and for me, we are still unfinished. There are thousands of questions I wanna ask, but I'll never get any answers. The ending came suddenly and to this day I still can't believe what happened. For me, the whole thing ended with a big question mark and a broken heart.
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BITTERSWEET

VERSE 1:
And there you go, I watch you walking in the sunrise
I'd hoped we could skip the goodbye
It's beyond crazy, but have I told you lately
that I held on to every word you said
I memorized every step you did
And those rainy days will fade away, you said
So the absolute downfall, doesn't happen in a minute
It takes months to realize that the only thing you really want
is a beautiful day

CHORUS:
And everytime you look up in the sky, you'll see me
And everytime the skies cry, it's a tear of mine
Oh dear, those flashbacks we call them memories,
oh oh, bittersweet

VERSE 3:
The other day it crossed my mind that maybe
I'm not the only one feeling this way
Maybe there's a distinct patter to all your stories
So tell me why, we fought for so long when you already knew
that this day would come
When you'd say goodbye and I'd cry
I can't believe this

BRIDGE:
Tell me how it ended
You and me, we'll always be unfinished
I wish I could vanish
We'll be only and lonely
Innocent and guilty
The ending will always show
A big question mark

love-love-love

Well I'm new at this so i have only written one song so ya
I will be adding to this though

Don't Let Me Go

I'm Sorry for the way i treated you
I didnt know love was just one word
I didn't know how fragile a heart could be
And as the months went by I dropped your heart
I'm so sorry...

(Chours)
Dont Let Me Go
dont leave me here
all alone
Without you
(repeat)

The words that i said didnt mean anything
I watched the moments in my head when you said
I love you and i just walked away
I'm so sorry

(repeat chorus)

I'm sorry for the way I treated you
.I'm sorry for the things I said
I'm sorry for the way i played with your heart

(repeat chorus but slower)



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Love You Perfectly

Verse 1:
If you’d reach out to something you can’t get
You’d maybe fall in love with someone you’ve just met
So baby go ahead and look in my eyes
And your broken heart will be finally fine

Verse 2:
Take a picture ‘cause this sweet memory
Will be remembered by us for a million times
Of course I know you wanna take it slow
But why would you wait for being mine

Chorus:
Baby, I wanna be the words inside your heart
The cure for your every single scar
Don’t you think I love you perfectly?
If I’d be the dark tunnel’s exit sign
The belt on a rollercoaster ride
Wouldn’t you love me?

Verse 3:
I’ve been changing shapes a lot lately
I’ll be what you wanna se and want me to be
I’ll turn my heart inside out and upside down
‘Cause you’re my sky and air and thoughts and ground

Repeat Chorus

Bridge:
Ain’t it easier to just be with me
When you wake up from a bad dream
And I’m your sweet girl, angel
Or would you rather have someone
Who’s always down to earth
Oh, I could be that girl

Repeat Chorus

Outro:
Wouldn’t you love me


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I just wrote this last night!

Beautiful Disgrace

Shameful self is so
Embarrassed to go
Out in the world
Cuz everyone knows
She played a game
A game I hate to play
Midnight has come
And I’m still wide awake
Engulfed in the flames
Of sadness and grief
Smoke starts to clear
But it’s still hard to see

(Chorus)
It’s like your world
Is coming down on me
It almost feels like
You’re pouring salt as I bleed
Forgiveness isn’t as easy
As it used to be
It’s a shame that forever
Could end so quickly

Shameful self can’t go
Out of this place
Without seeing you
A beautiful disgrace
She played with me
A game with my heart
I lost the fight when
You tore me apart
Flying from the blast
Shattered glass on the floor
Suddenly wish for you
When there’s a knock on the door

(repeat chorus)

Shameful self begs for you
Begging you not to go
We could’ve made it far
And now you’ll never know
There’s nothing I can do
But get u off my head
To untangle my heart
As it hangs on a thread

(chorus 2)
It’s like I’m holding
The world for u baby
How can u do this
I was crazy for u lady
Forgiving u is harder
Than it used to be
It’s a shame that forever
Was a lie you made me believe

Shameful self is so
Embarrassed to go
Out in the world
Cuz everyone knows
Shameful self can’t go
Out of this place
Without always seeing you
A beautiful disgrace



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